May 6, 2016

The Dream that Changed Everything (Part 2)

Because she was staring too long, she was approached by Arnold. He asked her: “Hi, were you a new student in this campus?” Gilly was very shocked because a very handsome and attractive guy cared to greet her. Her cheeks flushed and stutteringly she answered: “Oh… Yes, I am a new student here. And how about you?” then Arnold said: “I see. It seems that we haven’t met yet. Nice to meet you. What is your name? Where do you come from?” Gilly was very surprised that Arnold wanted to know her more detail. Gilly explained to Arnold: “Yeah, my name is Gilly, I came from Indonesia to study here.” Arnold was very captivated and they became closer and closer.
 It turned out that they were classmates. Arnold was absent when Gilly first joined the class because he went to his hometown, in Brisbane to visit his grandpa who was hospitalized. Since then they always talked and had lunch together every time they finished their classes. But many of her friends were green-eyed to her because Gilly was a new student there, but she had already attracted Arnold’s attention who was a very popular among the female students. Many or her schoolmates also wanted to get closer to Arnold because he was kind of perfect guy. He was clever, humble, responsible, friendly and helpful. This created a problem for Gilly, she felt depressed because most of her friends were hostile to her but Arnold always cheered her up when she was sad.
One Saturday night, Arnold invited Gilly to have dinner at a fine dining restaurant. Arnold booked a special room and decorated it romantically. He asked Gilly if she was willing to be her girlfriend. He said: “Gilly, would you be my girlfriend?” Actually Gilly was very surprised when Arnold expressed his feeling, however she was also very happy. She answered: “Yes, of course.” Then Arnold hugged and gave her a fresh bouquet flower. Gilly was very thankful and she hoped that their relationship would be long lasting.
 Having a relationship wasn’t easy for them. Many things came afterwards and they should face it together. Gilly got a problem. Because of her relationship with Arnold, she was shunned by her friends. To make matter worse, now Gilly realized that the scholarship she received wasn’t enough to cover her life expenses. If she wanted to continue her study, she should earn some money. Otherwise, she couldn’t afford to pay the boarding house. So Gilly decided to look for a part time job. She didn’t want Arnold to know about this problem in order not to burden him.
 It proved that finding a part time job at Australia wasn’t easy especially for Gilly who was a new comer. But her two best friends, Stephen and Prilly helped her to find the job.        
The following week, she got a part time job on a coffee shop. She was very thankful that she got a job. But her work schedule often crashed with her classes. She often had to skip classes and that made Arnold wondered. Arnold didn't know about Gilly's activity. When he tried to call Gilly, it always went to mailbox. 
 Arnold suspected that Gilly tried to keep a distance from him. So, he….. (TO BE CONTINUED)

4 comments:

  1. is it about love story? You made it in good way. Your grammar is correct, your way to tell the story also nice and detail.i hope in your next post gilly and arnold will be a romantic couple. Keep improving nia. Goodluck!

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  2. wow...
    is it romance story, Nia? I hope I have a real relationship like them :D
    so far your writing is good, Nia. Keep improving your writing, Nia.

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  3. I want to give a little feedback in paragraph 2, line 4 it should be "but she already had attracted Arnold’s" not "but she already had already attracted Arnold’s" Overall, I enjoy reading your story, Nia! Take care!

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    1. Thanks for your feedback, Fani. But I think it should be "had already attracted", I accidentally wrote it twice.. I will fix it :D

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